tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post2163885506232032332..comments2023-10-30T08:00:54.059-04:00Comments on Laurel's Leaves: Revising for emotionLaurel Garverhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-40322214569591487172009-11-11T09:11:55.505-05:002009-11-11T09:11:55.505-05:00Glad it's helpful. I thought I'd do a litt...Glad it's helpful. I thought I'd do a little commentary on how I went about revising a scene, especially bringing in a good resource I picked up at Borders over the weekend. Nancy Kress's books are AWESOME. <br /><br />The critique I had in mind was Kory's criticism of a scene in my fourth chapter where Heather is weirdly pushy with grieving Dani. The emotions and motivations in the interaction needed to be more mixed and explained (yay backstory) to make the scene work.Laurelhttp://laurelgarver.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-38374904440058813132009-11-10T16:33:49.786-05:002009-11-10T16:33:49.786-05:00Hmm... I think some of this sounds familiar. You m...Hmm... I think some of this sounds familiar. You may (and this could just be my faulty memory here) have recommended I revise some of my work for emotion in the past... :)<br /><br />Great post, Laurel. Once I finish the first draft of my roommates story (hopefully this week), I'll be doing just that. I've got all kinds of typed notes to myself, saying things like ((TOO MUCH HERE--SCALE BACK)), ((WHAT KIND OF DRESS?)). Emotion is definitely one of the things I'll be going through and tweaking. I might just refer back to this post while I do it.<br /><br />Thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com