tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post3052347901158978720..comments2023-10-30T08:00:54.059-04:00Comments on Laurel's Leaves: Eleventy-one Winner: Grand PrizeLaurel Garverhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-86685088678368187332010-04-20T08:40:04.945-04:002010-04-20T08:40:04.945-04:00Rosslyn: I like writing dialogue and thought other...Rosslyn: I like writing dialogue and thought others might, too. The persuasion/negotiation angle came when I tied in with Bilbo, who turns 111 in Fellowship of the Ring.<br /><br />Lydia: Thanks for coming by and following! I thought the contest would make better blog content if I brought in an educational element. Glad you liked it.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-39990152823539255342010-04-19T22:46:10.926-04:002010-04-19T22:46:10.926-04:00Congrats, and a special thanks for the critique ab...Congrats, and a special thanks for the critique about why it won. We don't get to see that as often!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-44196021168234310522010-04-19T00:34:24.693-04:002010-04-19T00:34:24.693-04:00Neat contest! I haven't seen one like this bef...Neat contest! I haven't seen one like this before. Thanks for running it.Rosslyn Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11304732306399786236noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-18979751129102531722010-04-18T21:52:25.386-04:002010-04-18T21:52:25.386-04:00Lynn: I plan to do some follow-up posts on dialogu...Lynn: I plan to do some follow-up posts on dialogue, so stay tuned.<br /><br />Jemi: Thanks for your encouraging words.<br /><br />Anne: Glad you enjoyed it.<br /><br />Carol: It was a fun contest to host--makes me miss editing & publishing a lit mag. Good luck with querying!<br /><br />Victoria: Your writing group is made of win! And yes, characterization is clearly Janet's strength. I'm excited to provide her critique prize!Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-64964878017654542192010-04-18T21:47:16.093-04:002010-04-18T21:47:16.093-04:00Simon: glad you enjoyed it.
Tricia: Each winning ...Simon: glad you enjoyed it.<br /><br />Tricia: Each winning entry was so different, too. I hope it was a fun learning experience for all.<br /><br />Janet: The weekend got away from me, but I'll send the marked pages soon.<br /><br />Karen: Thanks. The variety was especially cool.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-88428112899267761472010-04-18T12:35:22.503-04:002010-04-18T12:35:22.503-04:00Thanks Vicki! I'm blushing. :)Thanks Vicki! I'm blushing. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-76771862621372768822010-04-17T20:42:28.047-04:002010-04-17T20:42:28.047-04:00Aaah! My internet connection keeps kicking out or ...Aaah! My internet connection keeps kicking out or my mouse does. Must shoot computer. <br /><br />Janet, Laurel is correct. You do a great job on ALL your characters. They all have unique voices and suitable personalities to fit the voice and you do this despite a pretty large cast. Also, you have characters grow and change over time. This is a strength I've seen you develop. It's been a treat! Can't wait for the next book!Victoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14012092208934951963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-54812210785094768932010-04-17T19:47:40.565-04:002010-04-17T19:47:40.565-04:00Congratulations, Janet! I know what fabulous chara...Congratulations, Janet! I know what fabulous characterization you do, thanks to the fact that we're in the SAME WRITING GROUP! This is hysterical. You deserve it! I'll come talk to you in a bit, but I wanted to congratulate you here, too. :)Victoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14012092208934951963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-31165806872036731462010-04-17T18:44:58.095-04:002010-04-17T18:44:58.095-04:00Oh, I LOVE dialogue, especially when it's done...Oh, I LOVE dialogue, especially when it's done well--as fluidly and genuine as Janet's. Big congratulations to Janet on winning your contest!!<br /><br />I wish I'd had time to enter. I'm now in the scary pool of query madness. Eeep. But great contest, Laurel. You've done a fabulous job with it. I especially loved this entry. Teens, magic, and unrequited love...right up my alley.Carolina M. Valdez Schneiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11589934533051907801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-10352775206110507322010-04-17T17:03:33.440-04:002010-04-17T17:03:33.440-04:00Congratulations Janet, fabulous writing.
Thanks L...Congratulations Janet, fabulous writing.<br /><br />Thanks Laurel for hosting such a great contest where we could see each other's work. Great idea.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-51689174947829982802010-04-17T15:21:07.420-04:002010-04-17T15:21:07.420-04:00Congrats to Janet - I agree- terrific dialogue :)Congrats to Janet - I agree- terrific dialogue :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-77121433995946190592010-04-17T11:26:24.190-04:002010-04-17T11:26:24.190-04:00I agree with you regarding the dialogue tags, Laur...I agree with you regarding the dialogue tags, Laurel. But the dialogue was excellent. Congratulations to Janet and thanks Laurel for teaching me stronger dialogue techniques.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-88025463382421942652010-04-17T11:21:57.159-04:002010-04-17T11:21:57.159-04:00Congratulations, Janet! Great awards, Laurel.
Have...Congratulations, Janet! Great awards, Laurel.<br />Have a good weekend all:)Karen Langehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18177923284595298347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-82001998142917051372010-04-17T10:59:30.825-04:002010-04-17T10:59:30.825-04:00Laurel, that would be wonderful. Thank you!
And t...Laurel, that would be wonderful. Thank you!<br /><br />And thanks, everyone, for your comments! I'm so glad you liked it. Especially the thud. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-31201424753077361682010-04-17T10:55:27.842-04:002010-04-17T10:55:27.842-04:00Laurel, that would be wonderful. Thank you!
And t...Laurel, that would be wonderful. Thank you!<br /><br />And thank you, everyone, for your comments! I'm so glad you like it. Especially the thud. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-37574709420552995902010-04-17T10:50:35.333-04:002010-04-17T10:50:35.333-04:00Wonderful dialogue, Janet. I, too, loved the kicke...Wonderful dialogue, Janet. I, too, loved the kicker at the end, which added deeper layers to all that had gone between them.<br />Again, thank you so much, Laurel, for holding this excellent contest and for your insightful comments. Really. This whole experience rocked.Tricia J. O'Brienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05993110400088806252noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-16468032856566530682010-04-17T10:36:28.688-04:002010-04-17T10:36:28.688-04:00Ah, nicely done, ladies. The "thud" at t...Ah, nicely done, ladies. The "thud" at the end's what made it for me. :)<br /><br />Congratulations, Janet!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-30497136080836040632010-04-17T10:33:33.084-04:002010-04-17T10:33:33.084-04:00Janet: you're welcome. How about I mark up a d...Janet: you're welcome. How about I mark up a document and e-mail it? A few trims will make the pacing zingier, I think. But the basics are very solid, especially the characterization--such likable kids!Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-70827917653670746152010-04-17T10:31:55.444-04:002010-04-17T10:31:55.444-04:00Roxy: Woo hoo! I sure will. Thanks! For the recor...Roxy: Woo hoo! I sure will. Thanks! For the record, my kid is only 7, but my advice came from my experience as a teen--being tight with Dad made a difference. :-)<br /><br />Talli: the authenticity wowed me too.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-88273272435021005832010-04-17T10:29:19.076-04:002010-04-17T10:29:19.076-04:00Laurel, I'm seriously speechless. Thank you! A...Laurel, I'm seriously speechless. Thank you! And a comparison to Rowling? Wow.<br /><br />This has been a great contest. Not only fun, but I've learned so much. You can't ask for better.<br /><br />And I extra appreciate any comments where cuts are concerned. I think I'll take you up on that suggestion. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-62247077852754681232010-04-17T10:25:24.104-04:002010-04-17T10:25:24.104-04:00Congrats to Janet! I really enjoyed this - like Ro...Congrats to Janet! I really enjoyed this - like Roxy, mainly because of the dialogue. It was so believable!Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-81049644532797252922010-04-17T09:39:44.236-04:002010-04-17T09:39:44.236-04:00I'm a sucker for good dialogue, and this is ju...I'm a sucker for good dialogue, and this is just great. Thank you for the excellent teenager advice. I came upon it this morning, and it is so appreciated and true. I have a small gift for you. Could I get your address to mail it over? roxyhaynie@mac.com Thanks!Roxyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787088898112141579noreply@blogger.com