tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post9028771477619152137..comments2023-10-30T08:00:54.059-04:00Comments on Laurel's Leaves: T: Technique worth stealingLaurel Garverhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-1144986469076335232014-04-24T13:00:09.224-04:002014-04-24T13:00:09.224-04:00It can be a powerful way to layer in more emotion ...It can be a powerful way to layer in more emotion to a scene when you are revising. Thanks for coming by!Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-72558351675301180112014-04-24T12:59:27.517-04:002014-04-24T12:59:27.517-04:00I agree that picture book writers especially have ...I agree that picture book writers especially have to be aware of sound because they're nearly always read aloud. Great point. All my favorites to read to my daughter have had an almost poetic quality to the prose, even if they're not strictly written in verse.<br /><br />Stories should have cadence. Sentence length is one way to do that, and so is the sound texture of word choices. Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-79559002189029316302014-04-24T12:56:25.049-04:002014-04-24T12:56:25.049-04:00You're most welcome. I've had so much fun ...You're most welcome. I've had so much fun with this series!Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-5676311310501531632014-04-24T11:44:23.490-04:002014-04-24T11:44:23.490-04:00Thanks for this good information. I'll give it...Thanks for this good information. I'll give it a try.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-3026109311469599202014-04-24T03:52:37.799-04:002014-04-24T03:52:37.799-04:00Laurel,
Children's picture books are very goo...Laurel,<br /><br />Children's picture books are very good examples of the use of assonance. I suppose the words have to sound good and convey certain emotions because they are read out aloud, and need to appeal to a young listener.<br /><br />In my own writing, I try to be aware of sentence length and how words sound, even though no one probably reads them out loud. I think prose has a rhythm just like poems do. Anyway, I enjoyed your post and shall be thinking more about assonance in future!Sue Elvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04461161335483760142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-11233047600530085422014-04-23T22:37:28.176-04:002014-04-23T22:37:28.176-04:00I love the way you teach us about poetry! Thank yo...I love the way you teach us about poetry! Thank you so much.Saumyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08517289532769906489noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-70766801815509347782014-04-23T21:28:30.615-04:002014-04-23T21:28:30.615-04:00Keep in mind that repeated consonants will be more...Keep in mind that repeated consonants will be more noticeable, so you'll need to go lightly. Any technique that draws too much attention to itself can grate on readers.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-32296839507089362862014-04-23T21:27:13.187-04:002014-04-23T21:27:13.187-04:00The branding thing fascinates me. Is sound the rea...The branding thing fascinates me. Is sound the reason there aren't any cars sold in the US that start with U? (Something we noticed playing a road game on a car trip). <br /><br />Anyway, what you've learned from the marketing realm is likely the same thing I'm talking about--an association we make between certain sounds and feelings. Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-73902462430915251742014-04-23T21:23:43.515-04:002014-04-23T21:23:43.515-04:00I hope that now you understand the pattern, you...I hope that now you understand the pattern, you'll be able to see it elsewhere--kind of like some of those brain teaser puzzles with hidden images.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-19339491253041772722014-04-23T21:22:20.366-04:002014-04-23T21:22:20.366-04:00Had I used different words-- river not creek, boot...Had I used different words-- river not creek, boots not sneakers, marshgrass not reeds, it might not have struck you as much. A thesaurus can be a help when it comes to making sound patterns.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-45857325133031619592014-04-23T21:20:08.344-04:002014-04-23T21:20:08.344-04:00Sound devices can be fun to try. Keep in mind that...Sound devices can be fun to try. Keep in mind that repeated consonants and rhyme will be more obvious, so you need to go lighter than with assonance, which is more subtle. Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-45267298200858782962014-04-23T17:33:00.850-04:002014-04-23T17:33:00.850-04:00Cool exercise! I try to use more hissing "s&q...Cool exercise! I try to use more hissing "s" sounds when I write scenes from my vilainess' pov . . . it suits her character. :) I'll have to try this for other characters and other parts. Thanks for the tip!Tyrean Martinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-87358547284246555772014-04-23T16:04:07.437-04:002014-04-23T16:04:07.437-04:00Great tip! I hadn't thought of using sounds in...Great tip! I hadn't thought of using sounds in this way, at least not for writing. I've working in branding (specifically naming products and companies) and we used it there. For example, the deep "o" of your first example is good / important for a strong sounding, "weighty" company. But to use it in writing? Thanks for the great tip!<br /><br />Visiting via A to Z from <a href="http://passthesourcream.com/series/a-2-z-2014/" rel="nofollow">Pass the Sour Cream</a>. Co-Author (with my sons) of <a href="http://passthesourcream.com/go/kite-hill" rel="nofollow">The Secret of Kite Hill</a>.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05714929594179137473noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-52635564358329361792014-04-23T15:38:23.551-04:002014-04-23T15:38:23.551-04:00I've always loved any poetic touch on prose, b...I've always loved any poetic touch on prose, but I'm wondering now how much I've missed. I can definitely feel everything you described, but I felt it subtly - I'm not sure I would've been able to say what made me feel what I felt...so thanks for explaining it! :)<br /><br />Michelle @ <a href="http://myythmaker.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">In Media Res</a>Michelle Woodshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15776446691671444755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-87492821743801315382014-04-23T08:51:17.851-04:002014-04-23T08:51:17.851-04:00That third example was certainly sinister and spoo...That third example was certainly sinister and spooky!sjphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05772883091207430753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4263988256560129564.post-51622293382643040442014-04-23T08:21:41.311-04:002014-04-23T08:21:41.311-04:00I've been thinking about using a few more poet...I've been thinking about using a few more poetic techniques to add a slightly more literary edge to some things I'm working on.stuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16388674850920848503noreply@blogger.com